I could totally see the Backstreet Boys singin that song...

 

thanks man and yea the last verses containvietnamese. it doesnt rhyme but it ties it up with expressing how i feel about her. im curious is there anyone on here who speaks viet ?

 

the problem with writting is it comes in like a flood overwhelms you then you cant stop it then you lose the energy it takes to really put emotion into it... maybe im just drained ..too much stress . oh well chuc ngu ngon (good night)

 

That is cool. keep it up, Im shure she will melt (and that is what is all about)

Real men do gay things to get real women in bed... LOL

 

Good stuff, although the above line seems out of place.. a little X-Rated.. maybe its just my dirty mind.

 

lol when we met it was during the rainy season in ho chi minh. so it would go from being 80-90 deg and sunny to thunder/lighting and pouring down rain in a moments notice

this is the cafe where we had our 1st date. no joke like 5 minutes before this picture it was beautiful and sunny . it was still great cause i love the rain

 

I have to be honest, I am never really a fan of poems that rhyme, unless it is by someone like Robert Frost. I find I am always paying more attention to the words that are being rhymed than the actual sentiment. I also like to write. I like try to get my message across with the least amount of words. My hero is Emily Dickinson, as she was a master at that. You know what is a good habit to get into? Reading what you have written outloud to yourself. It is totally different thatn reading things back in your head. You can hear akward phrasing and even catch typo's that way. Should help some. When you invest time into writing, you are exposing your soul, and I applaud you sharing these personal things with us. I think the CBR Forum is a great place for poetry.

 

Shel Silverstein: Best Poet of all time!



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