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Old Feb 7, 2011 | 01:57 PM
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Hey everybody
This is a poem I wrote for creative writing class and thought I'd share

The Ride
When you thought you were nothing more.
Thought nothing was left.
The cool, steady wind
seeps through vents and mesh.
Sweeping through corners, the peripheral blur of pigments
become unmistakable,
the natural world, engraved by mans infrastructure.
The sensation of a living machine
both powerful, yet amazingly graceful
mask the certainties and security in life.
Every twist of the wrist brings an adventure,
flying ever closer to the unknown.
Pure sensations of life
conveyed through contours of pavement,
pulse with the suspension.
The recognizable feel of the perfect road
united by velocity makes the heart wild.
Never trade the thrills of life for the security of existence.
 
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Old Feb 7, 2011 | 02:01 PM
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Originally Posted by cnicosiaF4i
Hey everybody
This is a poem I wrote for creative writing class and thought I'd share

The Ride
When you thought you were nothing more.
Thought nothing was left.
The cool, steady wind
seeps through vents and mesh.
Sweeping through corners, the peripheral blur of pigments
become unmistakable,
the natural world, engraved by mans infrastructure.
The sensation of a living machine
both powerful, yet amazingly graceful
mask the certainties and security in life.
Every twist of the wrist brings an adventure,
flying ever closer to the unknown.
Pure sensations of life
conveyed through contours of pavement,
pulse with the suspension.
The recognizable feel of the perfect road
united by velocity makes the heart wild.
Never trade the thrills of life for the security of existence.
Nice write.

Now I'd like to see how you word a verse about an unplanned dismount :P
 
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Old Feb 7, 2011 | 02:13 PM
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Thank god I haven't experience that yet haha, but that might be the subject ill use. I need a 25 page portfolio by the end of the semester
 
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Old Feb 7, 2011 | 04:58 PM
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i like the last line
 
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Old Feb 7, 2011 | 08:06 PM
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awww i loved it thanks for sharing
 
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Old Feb 8, 2011 | 04:40 PM
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Originally Posted by drzed1980
i like the last line

Very good job man. That just made me wish it wasn't snowing out so bad.
 
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